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Dear Jane,
How are you?I am very happy these days.I really want to tell you something about our fashion show.
昨天晚上九点在我们学校礼堂举行了一场时装秀，很多老师和学生参派橡岩加了这个活尘御动。学校举行这次时装秀活动的目的是为希望工程筹款。活动举行的非常成功，也收到了各位老师同学募集的捐款。
时装秀表演分为多个项目，有一年四季的时装秀，如友有各个民族文化的时装秀，有国内国外的时装秀。我跟我们的好朋友杨平也参加了本次时装秀，我选择穿着唐装，杨平选择穿现代装。

我先给你写的汉语，然后翻译了，希望对你有用，如果还需要增添内容，再交流。
Last night at nine in our school hall held a fashion show, many teachers and students participated in this activity. The school hold the fashion show event aims to raise money for project hope. Activity was very successful, and received a distinguished teacher student collection.A fashion show is divided into a number of projects, a year-round fashion show, there are various national cultural fashion show, domestic and foreign fashion show. I told our good friend Yang Ping also participated in this fashion show, I choose wearing a Tang suit, Yang Ping chose to wear modern equipment.